An Unexpected Turn
As the wind was blowing against the fresh, green spring grasses, I laid down on the grass and thought of things that I could do for the day. I can't be a dancer for today because my partner is sick. I wasn't sure what to do with my time. Maybe I could go swimming instead. This is mostly likely not a very good plan since I'm not a very good swimmer but, I'm going to try it anyways. I gather my things and drive quickly. I step on the gas pedal to accelerate but, my front wheels got stuck in the potholes.
Again, well done with your punctuation. Your story has a very abrupt ending and isn't wrapped up with a concluding sentence. The beginning is very strong.
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