The Pain Fighter
I am suffering from a disease called stomachitis. It is a disease that caused my stomach to bloat and expand like a balloon so, I can’t really move that much. It’s hard to do things with this condition. I’m tired of this life so, I decided to have an operation that will improve my health. On the day of the operation, The Pain Fighter suddenly appeared and punched me right in my stomach. I fell to the ground with a loud thud, clutching my stomach in agony. I thought I was going to die but, he miraculously cured me.
I like you descriptive wording. Maybe add a little bit more of the pain fighter into it or the characters reaction to the pain fight when he first sees him.
ReplyDeleteYour story is a little confusing. I like how you included the words miraculously, agony, bloat, etc.
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