Yesterday, I noticed that it was a nice, sunny day so, I decided to go outside. I quickly grabbed my house keys, locked the door and rushed outside. I spent the whole day walking around the neighbourhood, taking pictures and enjoying the sun. When suddenly, I realized that it was getting dark. I headed back home, I was searching for my house keys when I found a hole in my pocket. I came into a realization that I had lost my keys.
Creative story! The only part I would fix is that you don't need a comma after 'quickly. Also I don't think you need the word 'when' before using the prompt because it would sound better without the word 'when' Good Job!
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